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× WhyI chose this topic?
✓ Why I chose this topic?
× Because of plastic, the marine ecosystem has reached an indescribably serious situation, and many animals are being sacrificed as a result.
✓ It's because of plastic that the marine ecosystem is at an alarmingly serious state, and many animals are being sacrificed as a result.
× Sea turtles mistake plastic bags for their prey, jellyfish, and eat them, but when they split their stomachs, a huge amount of plastic spills out.
✓ Sea turtles mistake plastic bags for their prey, the jellyfish, and eat them. When splitting their stomachs open, large amounts of plastic have been found.
× Not only sea turtles, but also most marine animals such as whales and fish are experiencing a similar situation.
✓ This is not an issue that affects only the sea turtles though, most marine life such as whales and fish are experiencing a similar situation.
× However, despite this situation, humans use a huge amount of plastic to avoid a brief annoyance.
✓ However, despite this situation, humans still use a huge amount of plastic to avoid a minor annoyance.
× Plastic items used for 5 seconds or 5 minutes are said to be decomposed only after 500 years.
✓ Plastic items used for 5 seconds or 5 minutes are said to decompose only after around 500 years.
× In the near future, the seriousness of this problem was realized again through the opinion of experts that there will be more plastic than fish in the sea.
✓ In the near future, the seriousness of this situation will be brought up again through the opinions of experts who will report that there is more plastic in the sea that marine life.